El Magen By Joel Liriano


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The Gist:
Freddy and Gustavo go on a normal trip to a museum and suddenly find themselves involved in an unexpected adventure revolving around a mysterious and powerful scroll.

What We Think
Reviewed by Dream Catcher
Number of Pages: 28
I've never been one for ebooks of any sort. But, hey, this was recommended to us, and it was only 28 pages, and there was a free download on smashwords. Win, win, win, right? That's what I thought. So I went on to smashwords and just viewed it from there. And I read it. I wanted to like it. But I did not. It wasn't the story itself that I didn't like. It was the writing. It was awkward and half of the lines were run-on sentences that didn't make any sense. There was this prologue thing at the beginning that served virtually no meaning to the rest of the story. It would have been better if the prologue was worded differently (I could hardly understand what was going on because of the unclear sentence structure) or if it had been taken out completely. The dialogue was also a really awkward. Most of it was too stiff and not something a normal kid would say (i.e. hello mother is weird, especially when compared to normal phrases like hey, hi or even hi, mom). So that really could have used some work. That's basically it...except I have to mention one more thing. At one point, Freddy's talking to his teacher and he addresses her, not as her actual name, but 'teacher'. He just says something like But, teacher - . Maybe it's just me, but I don't think people tend to say that. I dunno. It's something to think on. I wanted to like this. But I couldn't. Sorry.

Real Teen Rating ~ F : Don't even bother. 9781458124456 This was a fun quick read that I think my son would really enjoy for one of our read alouds. Two young boys out for an adventure, and find the key to time travel. A mystery unfolds and they try to protect this secret. Recommend to anyone who enjoys young adult stories. Think this will be fun to tell around the campfire this summer!! 9781458124456 Breve pero intenso. Muy interesante, pero al final me quedé esperando más. 9781458124456 This is a very charming and interesting short story about a young man who discovers that he is the keeper of the Magen, a document that holds the power to travel through time. Freddy and his friend Gustavo find the Magen while on a visit to a museum. They are transported four centuries back in time where the meet Ochu, a shaman who tells Freddy his mission. During his adventure, Freddy encounters mystical creatures and faces grave danger.
This story was originally written en espanol and consequently, the syntax is a little off but it is still well worth reading. 9781458124456 I really like the way the story develops slowly at the beginning, creating questions and then how it wraps you inside this fantasy world through a fast-paced finale that keeps you on edge until the very end.

Hope you enjoy reading this story as much as I did writing it! 9781458124456

Me gustó mucho la forma en que la historia se desarrolla, lento al principio, creando preguntas y luego cómo te envuelve dentro de este mundo de fantasía a través de un final acelerado que te mantiene prestando atención hasta el punto final.

Espero que disfruten leyendo esta historia tanto como yo disfrute escribirla! 9781458124456 Simplemente emocionante e intrigante! No podrán despegar la vista hasta que terminen de leer. Entren a Smashwords y compartan su opinión =D

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Disfruten! 9781458124456 Desde la infancia, mientras yo poetizaba, Joel inventaba historias que escribía en su ordenador o cuaderno con líneas, con la preocupación más que de satisfacer una necesidad interna, lograr causar en los lectores algún efecto. Da a luz a “El Magen” un cuento que a pesar de ser escrito por las manos de un empírico, logra generar (cual si fuera intencional la aplicación de una estrategia), la ansiedad que los literatos académicos escarban para sus obras. Una vez más cautivando paladares insistiendo en la fantasía que no dejas de amar, Felicitaciones Joel Liriano. Aquí os dejo mi síntesis:


“La amistad de Freddy y Gustavo se vuelve más significativa al experimentar juntos la privilegiada fantasía que dos niños tienen de vivir sobrepasando los límites de la realidad, al verse frente a un inoportuno pasado que no esperaban conocer sino en las clases de Historia de la escuela que Gustavo aborrecía y que le devolverían el interés de aprender algo mejor que los tenebrosos personajes del Halloween; y agregarían valor a la vida de Freddy ante una familia que lo expone a sus condiciones con sus inesperadas mudanzas. Todo ello gracias a los castigos producto de su inquietante relación en el aula, que ellos aprovechan como una oportunidad de dejarse guiar por la curiosidad logrando llegar más allá con EL MAGEN. Una obra que no te querrás perder, si eres de quienes gustan de hojear las aventuras como unos espectadores sensitivos, más que vivirlas sin contarlas”.

Saludos y abrazos,

Tu amiga siempre,
Cindy Cruz
destella-cindy.blogspot.com
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Seducidos por la curiosidad inspirada por un extraño y viejo manuscrito que según una leyenda tiene el poder de permitir viajar en el tiempo a su poseedor, Freddy y Gustavo se ven envueltos en una travesía totalmente inesperada luego de una visita al Museo de Historia.

El Magen, un artefacto muy poderoso y antiguo, los transporta a un lugar desconocido donde reciben ayuda y guía, a la vez que se les encomienda una misión muy importante que, llena de acción y suspenso, les abre las puertas a viajes fantásticos y al descubrimiento de criaturas místicas.

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